Half of that stuff was not needed. Besides the last panel they were just asking each other "Which way do we go?" 20 different ways.

A storyline such as this I would think would need a video instead of a comic...anyone agree wit this?

xbabiidee said: "What's the thingy at the top? o-o;" It REALLY looks like a "toy"

xVedris said: " Actually, yes. o_o ;-; That sucks. I would die if my Photoshop wouldn't open." Ya everyones ranting about quality and looking bad and its all cuz my photoshop wont go T_T so untill I fix it I'm stuck with paint....

AznXKevin77 said: " its nice that ur giving pointers but do you even MAKE comics anymore?" Actually, yes. o_o anmeguy said: " See the huge problem with most of this though is that I'm doing this using bannedstory/paint cuz my CS3 wont open and its tickin me off. Once I find a way to fix it the comics will be wayy better." ;-; That sucks. I would die if my Photoshop wouldn't open.

xVedris said: "My Pointers: • Your new banner is better than the old one, but remove the white spaces around the capsule thingymabob, so it doesn't look like some image copied off of Google. • The panel sizes seem about right, but it still looks kind of messy. Maybe stack them onto each other and separate them with lines? • When the two guys were going down the tower, their lines seemed a bit stiff and unreal. Try to envision yourself in that situation and find out what you would say if you were

xVedris said: "My Pointers: • Your new banner is better than the old one, but remove the white spaces around the capsule thingymabob, so it doesn't look like some image copied off of Google. • The panel sizes seem about right, but it still looks kind of messy. Maybe stack them onto each other and separate them with lines? • When the two guys were going down the tower, their lines seemed a bit stiff and unreal. Try to envision yourself in that situation and find out what you would say if you were

Yeah, what Veddy said. o.o In the last panel, they seemed way too emotionless, and for the whole walk, they didnt show anything. And the ZMM didn't look like too much of a threat. Not sure if it's supposed to be that way, or something. o.o EDIT : Never mind about the emotionless walk thing. o_o But the last panel was emotionless.

My Pointers: • Your new banner is better than the old one, but remove the white spaces around the capsule thingymabob, so it doesn't look like some image copied off of Google. • The panel sizes seem about right, but it still looks kind of messy. Maybe stack them onto each other and separate them with lines? • When the two guys were going down the tower, their lines seemed a bit stiff and unreal. Try to envision yourself in that situation and find out what you would say if you were one of them. T

You're doing much better with the panel construction, and better with editing too. But, as others have said, the dialogue needs a bit of work/emotion to make it seem more realistic. Good job, nonetheless.

FrostKun said: "The dialogue sounds so fake. The characters don't have emotion at all. It seems like they're robots. This series is kind of.. dry." QFT, this is simply horrific.

The banner still kinda disturbs me with its shape.

FrostKun said: "The dialogue sounds so fake. The characters don't have emotion at all. It seems like they're robots. This series is kind of.. dry." totally, seems like a fast anime cartoon like old speed racer....

Put me in it.

The dialogue sounds so fake. The characters don't have emotion at all. It seems like they're robots. This series is kind of.. dry.