I remember this girl .

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thread starter JiminyRobins Aug 30 2010 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

She was so great.. She seemed kinda unapproachable at first, but I got to know her and he was really interesting. Her name was Zenea and she seemed to disappear after a year.. I remember passing by her in the hallway and she'd say hi and she was really friendly and nice. One day, I decided to ask her out. I was kinda nervous at first, but later, I asked her and she said yes. I was ecstatic. The date went great (Not gonna go into details) and we really clicked. I had this crazy attraction to her and she did too. We'd make out and do a ton of inappropriate in the locker rooms, but I was there to listen to her and she'd listen to my problems. It seemed like we were gonna be together forever... After 4 or 5 months, it was summertime. A time to let loose and have some fun with my one and only. I was planning to take her to the Santa Monica Pier where I had set up a bonfire for just us two. I waited and waited, but she never came. The next day, I texted her, but her phone number didn't exist. I longed for a sign. Something to indicate she was real.. Until one day, a text came in. It was from Zenea. "I'm sorry, but I had to move to Central America for my father's job as a red cross aid.. I love you, and I never want to forget you! I want a long distance relationship with you.. I know they never work out.. but I love you so much." She then proceeded to call me for what seemed to be an eternity, but I never wanted her to hang up.. We sent packages of current events with each other. We had webcam dates and it usually ended with one of us crying. She baked her cupcakes to send to me and I sent newspapers and souvenirs to her. We knew it was time to end it. We decided, after a summer of long-term dating, that we can't stay together and sane at the same time. I needed her and she longed for me. I decided to go to Honduras myself. Part 2. Ahh, Honduras. The smell of crisp tropical air, white sandy beaches, and best of all, Zenea. Oh, how I longed for this day and for once, I thought it was all gonna work out.. Till it donned upon me that there was no Red Cross at the address she gave me. I was furious, but more curious. I was certain she wanted to see me.. Why would she give me a wrong address? Was she in a hurry? What was the problem? A trap. A large net tangled me from above. Knives struck my legs and pinned me down. What the hell was going on? A flood of emotions came and rendered me immobile. Thoughts followed suit. "Who was Zenea? Who's behind this? Why me? Why now? Why her?" Uncontrollable tears and yells for help were all for naught. I waited. I listened. It seemed the villain had left. The knives.. He--it wanted me to escape. It wanted me to follow and track it down. And so I shall. Part 3. While my legs recovered I had to continue my search on my wheelchair. I felt so.. weak. Not physically, but mentally. How could I have fallen for that- that beautiful vixen? I still couldn't give up hope that she's still out there.. Being held captive.. Whose only h

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waver66 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

he cant continue he killed himself? :o

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JiminyRobins 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

waver66 He killed his soulmate; his heart. He just figured life wasn't worth living anymore.

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bmgod3002 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

Great story dude ^^.

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JiminyRobins 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

You really think so? Cause I emailed my English teacher this for the lulz and she said it was subpar with all my previous works.

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waver66 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

JiminyRobins icic....

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Thanteo 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

That was a beautiful story (Part 1). That was an awesome story (Part 2/3).

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adorexx 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

How touching

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WrathX 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

Kinda stupid after the first part...

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xyhro 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

Nothing more better then an AK. Heh

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GizzyJones 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

[quote] WrathX : Kinda stupid after the first part... [/quote] I agree with this. It's an interesting story but it's not very logical and things change too suddenly and too drastically.

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ZeroKnightz 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

This is quite the short story.

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Johasua 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

Parts 1 and 2 were amazing. I was seriously touched by the emotion. But part 3 is when it really started to get out of hand and didn't make much sense.

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Harman2 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

And then I woke up from this crazy dreaaaamm. And I was like WUT? And then I phoned zenea and she wazzz all like ima dumpin you. I was so obsessed with her and i was like dayuuuuuuuuuuuuuum. And then I moved on after posting a thread about our love that was going to last foeva on basilmarket.

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xKhiyen 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

(: I enjoyed the first part the most

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Harman2 08/31/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

[quote] Harman2 : And then I woke up from this crazy dreaaaamm. And I was like WUT? And then I phoned zenea and she wazzz all like ima dumpin you. I was so obsessed with her and i was like dayuuuuuuuuuuuuuum. And then I moved on after posting a thread about our love that was going to last foeva on basilmarket. [/quote] Edit: I enjoyed it, but from one writer to another this story lacked a bit of structure and some things needed to be thought out more. Just my 2 cents, but I enjoyed the story for something that you consider rushed :D You should give us a story that isn't rushed :DD

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