A maple fanfic~

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thread starter Plusle4eva Mar 01 2010 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

Note: yay! Hey guys here's the first chapter as promised! I'll update regularly for new chapters or dumb typos you notice xD oh and this ones sorta boring, but it's necessary for the story to flow. I made the first 5 chapters before I opened the recruitment thread, so you won't be mentioned until then. Read and review! Ahh my hands are going numb from cold -.- kekeke enjoi!~ Edit 1: aand here's the second chapter! Hope you like it! Read and review~ BTW I am still recruiting! Check my basilID for the thread. And as per usual, flamers and trolls shall be ignored cheerfully. Constructive critism is welcome: but that doesn't mean it's an invitation for emo. Oh and tell me what I did right xD A maple fanfic chapter 1: the beginning of the end Disclaimer I don't own maplestory or any of the names: they belong to nexon and the names are real players. I only own the storyline xD and the choose your weapon thingy. �� It all started on a cool, sunny day. �� A boy named Josh stood before a metal door. He had been directed here by Nella, a young girl with vivid purple eyes and two short pigtails. �� Josh walked in through the automatic sliding door. As soon as he stepped in, a bright neon light had hit him full on the face. He staggered at the sudden light, but when he recovered he saw that the jazz bar was empty. �� ********* �� "Sir, shall we proceed?" a young nightlord asked. �� "Yes." the single word was spoken with such coldness that it filled the nightlord's mind. �� "Okay." the nightlord went on her way, flash jumping into the darkness..... �� ********* � �� "Hello? I'm here to become a theif!" Josh called out loudly. �� "So you're the boy from maple island?" a deep voice asked. �� "Who's there?" Josh immediately drew the razor he had been given to by Mai. �� "No point trying to battle me boy, you're far too weak at the moment."the dark lord sighed. "I presume you wish to become a theif?" �� "Yes." Josh hastily stowed away his weapon. �� "Before you make your desicion, please be aware that once you make your desicion, there is no turning back. So would you like to become a theif?" asked the dark lord. �� "Yea." �� "Very well. You are now a theif." the dark lord said. �� A yellow light enveloped him and suddenly he felt more powerful. A wristguard and a dagger appeared out of thin air. �� "Choose the weapon you shall use." the dark lord instructed. Josh nodded breifly, then he reached his hand to the wristguard. As soon as his hand touched it, then 3 leather pouches with a picture of a throwing star marked by the word 'beginner' appeared by his hip. He rummaged in his pack, and found that he had more space than usual. He found a skillbook containing all his skills as a beginner theif. There was also a medal beside his brown skullcap. He pinned the medal on, then said,"Thank you." �� "Don't worry. Just be careful out there: later I can give you some trainin

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SnailTrail 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

COOL! Love fanfics.

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Humanmango 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

Too much conversation and not enough narration. Your sentences are too choppy, and could stand to be a lot longer. There's also a disturbing lack of description...

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PeopleDONTdie + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

[quote] Humanmango : Too much conversation and not enough narration. Your sentences are too choppy, and could stand to be a lot longer. There's also a disturbing lack of description... [/quote] Look on the bright side, at least she didn't fix your grammar mistakes.

kcwt 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

"So you would like to become a thief?" "yea " "ok, you are now a thief" wut lol that just seemed funny

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Plusle4eva 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

Lol! Human mango thanks for the tip! I'll keep that in mind when I submit the second chapter. Lol I can't describe armor very well, since my range doesn't extend to levels above level 50 and definitely not pirates. I'm researching xD

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wog4lf 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

[quote] kcwt : "So you would like to become a thief?" "yea " "ok, you are now a thief" wut lol that just seemed funny [/quote] yea it does seem a bit weird. OT: i like it

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bubblepop 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

lol i love it xd

Psych0Spaz2 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

[quote] kcwt : "So you would like to become a thief?" "yea " "ok, you are now a thief" wut lol that just seemed funny [/quote] Lol now you say it, it actually is quite funny . And guys, stop worrying about grammar, your only saying that cause you have nothing else better to say. Im sure she could type it out better if she tried.

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mapleplatoon 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

I got in! Sure, I'm evil, but I'm still in!

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ChibiFever 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

Ooh, I love it already! ^^

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Hyperstep 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

I always found that weird, full grown adults ready and willing to give kids dangerous weapons.

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eliteguard 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

Sounds good! I like it!

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Plusle4eva 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

Thanks guys! And ya: I know that the "do you want to be a theif?" "yea" "ok you're now a theif" sounds awkward xD after I reread it :3 o to let you guys know: I have you in chapters 6+. Coz that's when I started the recruiting thread. Trolls and flamers shall be ignored even more cheerfully now that I'm starting to type chapter 2! And yes: I know it's short compared to chapter 7. I looked back and was like OMGHOWSHORTISTHISCHAPTER D: besides it gets more interesting here xD

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isentryx 03/01/10 + PM | QUOTE | PERMALINK | REPORT

Looks kinda like "Revolt of the Archers" maybe?

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