Like What the fekz0rs at the guys expression in Panel 2

Is he holding a staff with one hand o_0 Edit: wow i havent plaied maple in a while cuz it only takes one hand in there, but still it jsut looks wrong

mangamania said: "Ignore critisicm especially the word with F,A,I,L in it. I mean, your attempt was pretty good, I chuckled a little at the end. Maybe it would've been funnier if you ended it with a "What the F...!" O_O Nevermind." You want him to ignore criticism ? That is the stupidest idea ever

Ignore critisicm especially the word with F,A,I,L in it. I mean, your attempt was pretty good, I chuckled a little at the end. Maybe it would've been funnier if you ended it with a "What the F...!" O_O Nevermind.

your 3rd attempt would be stopping D: i suggest practicing, and showing your friends irl first rather than testing them on basil...

EPIC FAIL *i thought the slime's mouth was smoke in the panel where the king slime says "oh rly?"* Next itme, have like a actual plot.

i3xk00ixkid said: "I speak for everybody else. Bad quality. Bad joke. Ugly 6th panel. Waste of photoshop brushes or whatever.Grainy. Worst i ever seen"

I'd rather take three dumps then read this again. -_- Complete fail.

I speak for everybody else. Bad quality. Bad joke. Ugly 6th panel. Waste of photoshop brushes or whatever.Grainy. Worst i ever seen

The mage's face is way too low.

I rofl'd at how panel 6.

Um, how about you make this your last attempt?

I almost puked.

I wouldn't say it's hard to follow. Guy's walking in a forest, hears a cry for help, finds a mage fighting a king slime, the mage can't kill it alone, so the warrior helps. The only problem, aside from editing techniques, which someone more experienced will have to help you with, is that the comic has no point. I mean, sure, it's part one, but what is there to make people want to read part 2, you know? The mage is pretty much saved, and the "happy go lucky" warrior guy is strong enough to hold K

Yeah but Burnedmagic's criticism is rather low level. Title is quite irrelevant and poor looking, hardly noticeable, use less detail and more Title. The custom faces or just cash ones are fine imo, I mean long as they fit in the panel with whats going on. Text bubbles are too big...have you tried just typing them out in game and screen shot with some ms paint editing?