xVedris said: "My Pointers: • Since you zoomed into the character in the 2nd panel, you have to do the same for the background. o_o Because then it wouldn't make sense. • Master Grendel is used in many series; comics and animations. I would suggest using someone else since he's a bit overused nowadays. Try to avoid other similarities with other series like Grendel teaching the main character and telling a story when he was a kid. • The last 4 panels are way too huge. Even if you made it that big

I'm disappointed this is not Crandelmeade's...

My Pointers: • Since you zoomed into the character in the 2nd panel, you have to do the same for the background. o_o Because then it wouldn't make sense. • Master Grendel is used in many series; comics and animations. I would suggest using someone else since he's a bit overused nowadays. Try to avoid other similarities with other series like Grendel teaching the main character and telling a story when he was a kid. • The last 4 panels are way too huge. Even if you made it that big to emphasize t

One more guy who uses 'Master Grendel' and im shooting myself

I didn't quite understand it o.o

There's not enough "action" in this issue. I mean a guy calling another guy and the other guy picks up and BAM its over.... Next time, try to add more story in one issue. I know you can do it :D

orbis is experiencing the natural phenomenon of "evening" grendal on the other hand is finally dead due to being really old

I'm glad you fixed the your/you're thing :D

GreenDragon said: "Lol. Where is he?" Im guessing thats "THE AMAZING CLIFF HANGER" Haha

MaxxDK said: "You included yourself, this is going to be bad." Shut up. Just shut up.

You included yourself, this is going to be bad.

Lol. Where is he?