-points out Bargee's grammar error- :3 BargeM said: "It may become more interesting. A good story starts off slow. Summary of part 1: Girl 'risks' live to deliver message to this guy we have not identified yet. The girls father and the mans boss = hate each other. The cops are up their asses. Girl + Guy = Forming Alliance. Thats part 1."

Also, again. Well done! But you can't quite read the text boxes. I liked the effect on the first panel, but the other ones were just to dark. Maybe if you used a less transparent text box..

its good, but where in orbis are they supposed to meet, orbis is big.........over 100 floors big =]

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Er, you can find the rest of the comics at the link I posted at the info box. All of them are already made, I just decided to put them on basil after I got them all finished. Kind of got lazy with the expressions Edit: Ms. Kiwi, Mr. Pinecone, Ms. Rosemary, Mr. Moo Moo, and Ms. Peachy are all based off people I know in Ms(the looks). Edit 2: I guess they didn't put up my link. I'll upload them onto my profile soon. Edit 3: They're on the part of my Profile of, "Chat with iLoveMangos."

I can't even read this please fix D:

quick tip: Dont have transparent text bubbles with a dark BG and black text o_o

It's pretty good, but slow start. Oh, and Nexon made the background. It's on the maple website.

Don't over exaggerate.. you can read it.

WolfXLord said: "I'll ride my hand up your butt :D" And Jimmy took my word. D: Nice work, Susan. By the way, thinking of making expressions? I barely sees this as an interesting comic without them. �_o

It may become more interesting. A good story starts off slow. Summary of part 1: Girl 'risks' live to deliver message to this guy we have not identified yet. The girls father and the mans boss = hate each other. The cops are up their asses. Girl + Guy = Forming Alliance. Thats part 1.

If it was made by a boy everbody would have said that it sucked hard.. and yea it does..

ImNotHUNGRY said: "This is good, and interesting!" Exactly. I love it. {Posts to come back and check your comics later}

Nathan555126 said: " how? O.o" Romance hair is Light's hair And the girl's hair quite resemble Misa's hair as well. Oh and the thing next to the guy appears to be the "death note"

Crap. Some basilers are so freakn harsh. It's called constructive criticism . Where you give advice not bag the crap out of someone. Jeebus. The comic was interesting but the panels were hard to read. Try a lighter text on a dark background. :P